I loved reading your essay! You did a great job incorporating the different elements for the multimodal essay. I especially loved the graph and the pull quote that you included. Your thesis is strong, and it really draws the reader in to continue reading your essay. Some things to possibly consider for your final draft might be when you are explaining your brother’s life story about epilepsy consider explaining what epilepsy is and how it affects someone on a daily basis. Also consider adding a picture of you and your brother because it might make that piece a bit more personal and help the reader relate to you on a deeper level. Also, in the conclusion, consider tying your paper together by adding a general statement on how narratives have affected you personally. Consider relating everything back to the story about your brother because it might make for a more cohesive essay. I really enjoyed reading your essay!