I thought your paper was very well written, I really loved the quotes that you used, and I also thought that you made a lot of unique points in your essay that I had not heard of before. I did think that it would be beneficial if you added a little more personal experiences to your essay. I feel like it would really benefit your writing and allow you to connect with your reader more. For example, you could use the sculptures or animations that we use in anatomy. Also, when reading your two naysayer paragraphs, I felt that you could consider making it one paragraph and maybe taking out some of the “fluff” to make it a little bit shorter because the length might be a little bit awkward. Other than that, your thesis was clear, and you had great claim sentences that helped in making your paragraphs flow very nicely together within your essay.