I thought your paper was very well written, I really loved the quotes that you used, and I also thought that you made a lot of unique points in your essay that I had not heard of before. I did think that it would be beneficial if you added a little more personal experiences to your essay. I feel like it would really benefit your writing and allow you to connect with your reader more. For example, you could use…
I loved reading your essay! You did a great job incorporating the different elements for the multimodal essay. I especially loved the graph and the pull quote that you included. Your thesis is strong, and it really draws the reader in to continue reading your essay. Some things to possibly consider for your final draft might be when you are explaining your brother’s life story about epilepsy consider explaining what epilepsy is and how it affects someone on a daily…
Your essay was very nicely worded and well thought out. I enjoyed your introduction and how it really connects with the reader and makes them want to read more. The only things that I think you should consider for your final paper is maybe making your thesis into a clear statement not a question. Also, in your second paragraph, consider writing about the connection between perception and metaphors in the fact that the way someone perceives a metaphor can completely…
